Bloody Eyeballs Are Happy Eyeballs

Herbert Bayard Swope

“Don't forget that the only two things people read in a story are the first and last sentences. Give them blood in the eye on the first one.” – Herbert Bayard Swope, Born Jan. 5, 1882.

That's why your opener should fuck the reader in the brain, right through their eye socket, planting the seed of your will deep into the womb of their suggestible brain.

Their worst problem/fear/worry?  You've got the final solution to kill it dead.  And it's a secret you stole from conspiring oppressors.  You're sharing it now because you're kindred spirits.  Alike in so many ways.  Fated to meet and unite in this way.

And while they read your words, an intriguing, infectious idea takes hold of their curiosity.  The seed is taking root.  They must keep reading.  That idea gestates and grows.  Curiosity becomes interest.  Interest evolves into desire.

This process doesn't necessarily feel good.  Growth is uncomfortable.  Pains are agitated.  Worries are multiplied.  Anxiety rises.  The problem is so much bigger and scarier than they thought.  It's way worse.  It's too much to deal with.  They can't do it – they just can't…

But relief is around the corner.

With purchase comes release.  Buying your thing will set that idea free to become a real world benefit.  A positive result lies just on the other side of this painful transition.  The problem is real.  It's coming to a head.  It's time to decide or else give up.

Of this they are convinced.  They are committed to this path.  They couldn't shake loose this desire now even if they walked away.  They may as well go all in with you.  After all, you planted the seed.

But as it grew, they fed it of their own flesh and blood.  Their memories are part of it.  Their dreams and hopes now have a form.  The idea belongs to them now.  It's part of them.  And it won't go away until they accept it and comply…

Then your closer should be the pillow talk where you tell them this is right and good, and promise to stick around and fully support them in raising that offspring to maturity.  You're gonna be there to make sure they raise it right.  They'll be oh so happy.

Satisfied.  Fulfilled.  Very soon.

All they have to do is trust you… and give you their money.

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